增强英语语句的有效方法

　　纵观多年来国家四、六级英语作文考试，考生作文成绩欠佳的主要原因除了准确性和连贯性差之外，语句软弱无力也是不容忽略的一个方面。因此在英语写作教学中，如何增强语句表现力的问题必须引起我们足够的重视，以提高学生写作的表达质量。为此，笔者结合自己的写作教学实践，针对该项技能的训练提出了一些切实可行的有效做法，供广大同仁和英语学习者参考借鉴。

　　一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。

　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如：

　　weak: the trees are bare。 the grass is brown。 the landscape seems drab。

　　revision:the brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape。 (转换为前置定语)

　　or: the landscape， bare and brown， begged for spring green。 (转换为并列结构作后置定语)

　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：

　　1) weak: the team members are good players。

　　revision: the team members play well。

　　2) weak: one worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness。

　　revision: one worker's plan eliminates tardiness。

　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：

　　1) weak: there is no opportunity for promotion。

　　revision: no opportunity for promotion exists。

　　2) weak: here are the books you ordered。

　　revision: the books you ordered have arrived。

　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：

　　1、poor: my supervisor went past my desk。

　　better: my supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk。

　　2、poor: she is a careful shopper。

　　better: she compares prices and quality。

　　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：

　　1、weak: the organization has been supported by charity。

　　better: charity has supported the organization。

　　2、weak: the biscuits were stacked on a plate。

　　better: mother stacked the biscuits on a plate。

　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：

　　1、wordy: my little sister has a preference for chocolate milk。

　　improved: my little sister prefers chocolate milk。

　　2、wordy: we are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations。

　　improved: we have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation。

　　3、redundant: we had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire。

　　improved: we had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire。

　　4、redundant: my sister and i bought the same， identical dress in different stores。

　　improved: my sister and i bought the same dress in different stores。

　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：

　　1、weak: they will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form。

　　improved: they will not agree to any of his proposals。

　　2、weak: i need her financial input before i can guesstimate our expenditures next fall。

　　improved: i need her financial figures before i can estimate our expenditures next fall。